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    Web Journey Review

    I know the Web Journey design needs a lot of work. However, I can't code very well, and I don't have enough money to hire a designer (yet) so please ignore that.

    What do you think of the content? I want to improve make my writing as great as possible.

    Thanks for all your feedback! (oh and don't be afraid to be hard on me)

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    Where is the site to review? Can't find a link :s

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    I will just review the external appearance. Corey is the best person to review the writing.

    You need a better logo to make you stand out a bit from other Thesis blogs.

    "SUBSCRIBE (IT WILL MAKE YOU COOL)" - The cool part is not needed as it messes up the pages allignment.

    You need a favicon.

    On the about page- "(oh and btw the way sorry I can’t post a picture, my parents will not let me" You need to close the bracket.

    Center the banner of Winning the web.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Aquarezz View Post
    Where is the site to review? Can't find a link :s
    It is in his signature.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Farrhad A View Post
    I will just review the external appearance. Corey is the best person to review the writing.

    You need a better logo to make you stand out a bit from other Thesis blogs.

    "SUBSCRIBE (IT WILL MAKE YOU COOL)" - The cool part is not needed as it messes up the pages allignment.

    You need a favicon.

    On the about page- "(oh and btw the way sorry I canít post a picture, my parents will not let me" You need to close the bracket.

    Center the banner of Winning the web.

    Cheers!
    Agreed. You should fix all of the things Farrhad talked about. I guess I'll have to review your content since he called me out like that, huh? :P

    The first thing that caught my eye: "logo's are more important than you think." Logos is correct. Logo's is incorrect. You never use an ' to make things plural. never.

    Your content has one problem in particular - you use a lot of run-on sentences. In addition, it could be cleaned up in terms of structure. Let me explain:

    Have you ever thought about why you remember something? If it is say a pair of Nike shoes, you probably remember the Nike swoosh. It if is "Tricks Yogurt" you will probably remember the rabbit.

    What about a website? You usually remember the logo. A logo of a website is what it is identified by. (well, that and the name) This is why every website or blog should have a great logo easily visible.


    Those two paragraphs should be rewritten as:

    Have you ever thought about why you remember something? If it is, say, a pair of Nike shoes, you would probably remember the Nike swoosh. If it's "Tricks Yogurt," you'll probably remember the rabbit.

    What about a webste? A website is defined by its logo. This is why ever blog should have an easily visible, great logo.


    The best way to improve your writing is to read. Books, not blog posts. Published materials that have been edited for grammar and spelling and other such things. It doesn't matter what books, but you should read some.

    One last thing: Becoming a Perfect Commentator | Web Journey

    Why is the type in that post huge? O.o

    You've got a cool blog, but you should work on refining your content even more if you want to reach your visitors on their level.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Sneakyheathen View Post
    Agreed. You should fix all of the things Farrhad talked about. I guess I'll have to review your content since he called me out like that, huh? :P

    The first thing that caught my eye: "logo's are more important than you think." Logos is correct. Logo's is incorrect. You never use an ' to make things plural. never.

    Your content has one problem in particular - you use a lot of run-on sentences. In addition, it could be cleaned up in terms of structure. Let me explain:

    Have you ever thought about why you remember something? If it is say a pair of Nike shoes, you probably remember the Nike swoosh. It if is "Tricks Yogurt" you will probably remember the rabbit.

    What about a website? You usually remember the logo. A logo of a website is what it is identified by. (well, that and the name) This is why every website or blog should have a great logo easily visible.


    Those two paragraphs should be rewritten as:

    Have you ever thought about why you remember something? If it is, say, a pair of Nike shoes, you would probably remember the Nike swoosh. If it's "Tricks Yogurt," you'll probably remember the rabbit.

    What about a webste? A website is defined by its logo. This is why ever blog should have an easily visible, great logo.


    The best way to improve your writing is to read. Books, not blog posts. Published materials that have been edited for grammar and spelling and other such things. It doesn't matter what books, but you should read some.

    One last thing: Becoming a Perfect Commentator | Web Journey

    Why is the type in that post huge? O.o

    You've got a cool blog, but you should work on refining your content even more if you want to reach your visitors on their level.
    Really I put that? That's weird. Yea, I definitely know that rule.

    Thanks, I really do need to look at structure. The problem is that I am too lazy to rewrite my posts. From now on I will do two drafts.

    Thanks Corey!

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    I think your blog has potential to be really great, but there are a few things I can point out.

    1) The Subscribe (It will make you cool) message is kind of lame
    2) You should cut the link names. "Home of greatness" should just be "home." Nav menus aren't usually the place to screw around with, and I can almost guarantee that people with small monitors see a messed up, misaligned menu.
    3) I took a few screenshots of things messed up on your blog you may want to look at:

    http://www.grabup.com/uploads/52f351...fb9e24dc2d.png
    The text would look better on the top

    http://www.grabup.com/uploads/31319c...6dcce05cf5.png

    4) I think you should really organize the content after your posts. It takes forever to scroll fro the content to the comment form.

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    Okay, I will make sure to fix. Thanks!

    Quote Originally Posted by Alex Fraiser View Post
    I think your blog has potential to be really great, but there are a few things I can point out.

    1) The Subscribe (It will make you cool) message is kind of lame
    2) You should cut the link names. "Home of greatness" should just be "home." Nav menus aren't usually the place to screw around with, and I can almost guarantee that people with small monitors see a messed up, misaligned menu.
    3) I took a few screenshots of things messed up on your blog you may want to look at:

    http://www.grabup.com/uploads/52f351...fb9e24dc2d.png
    The text would look better on the top

    http://www.grabup.com/uploads/31319c...6dcce05cf5.png

    4) I think you should really organize the content after your posts. It takes forever to scroll fro the content to the comment form.

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